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BOOK REVIEW: KNIGHT'S ANGEL
BY RONDA MELENDEZ

We hope you enjoy this book review by Carolyn LeComte.



Knight’s Angel, by Ronda Melendez is an ambitious undertaking by the author to weave a tale of wizards and magic, knights and ladies, all swept together by time- and dream-travel as Angel finds her true love and soul mate. The story has promise, as Angel flees a betrayal and goes on a journey away from everything she knows, swept back into time and history. There is a hint of magic and mysticism, too, as she deals with the sorcerer, Llewellyn, in her dreams.

Unfortunately, this book would have benefited from rigorous editing and rewriting. It is heartbreaking to see a new writer self-publish before the book is ready to be released. I commend Ms. Melendez for her passion and dedication. Her story is inventive and creative. However, the telling of this tale is unexciting and makes about every mistake a new author can make. Nothing brings the reader into the “head” of Angel. I never got a sense of what was going on in her mind, her senses – whether it was fear, happiness, pain – nothing communicated the visceral part of the character. This story was told, not shown, with an excessive use of adverbs (“slightly,” for example), adjectives, and clichés. Attending to this problem alone would have made the book more readable. There were also grammatical errors which should have been addressed. Many opportunities for rich dialogue were glossed over; I got the sense the author tried to hurry the story along, thereby missing the chance to get the reader more involved. Much of the telling of this tale is in “information dumps” which would have benefited by more elaboration, bringing more dynamics into play.

It is upsetting to have to deliver an unfavorable review, especially to a new author. I hope Ms Melendez can use what’s been said here to improve her future writing; I feel her passion and drive are quite strong, and with the right editing and guidance – and patience – she will find success, for I’m sure for someone as creative as she seems to be, there are good things to come.

REVIEWED BY CAROLYN LECOMTE

DO NOT REPRINT WITHOUT PERMISSION OF THE REVIEWER, CAROLYN LECOMTE


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